tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4663480056175321369.post1416556311461515412..comments2023-06-20T04:07:29.353-07:00Comments on Highland Rogue Writing: A Little Teaser - Tears of HeavenRobRoy McCandlesshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07397516891800422514noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4663480056175321369.post-61282567153804554042013-07-24T15:19:15.524-07:002013-07-24T15:19:15.524-07:00Thanks! It's a rough draft, and these details...Thanks! It's a rough draft, and these details sometimes get lost. Hence the need for a good editor (which I now have). More to come!RobRoy McCandlesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07397516891800422514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4663480056175321369.post-4453905036077180412013-07-24T11:08:32.455-07:002013-07-24T11:08:32.455-07:00"Cold-filled pain suffused her shoulder and c..."Cold-filled pain suffused her shoulder and caused it to spasm painfully."<br /><br />Pain causes something to happen painfully? You might consider re-writing that. <br /><br />Otherwise I really can't wait for the book. Jamiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14799657065305384676noreply@blogger.com